Am I only treasure you can collect by accident
for those rainy days when there’s nothing to do
so you can recollect a time when you were crazy
driving 90 on a 30 stretch, not even slowing down
for speed bumps, you’re a drive by, a killing with no exit.
My eyes light up when it sees your name
I want to sing when I hear your melody
walking through my burning thoroughfare
lights me up when you do anything.
8 thoughts on “Love Song”
Such interesting emotions in this poem…almost like feeling you’re being used by someone else…thanks for sharing your poem.
Thanks for stopping by.
i agree with slpmartin about the emotions felt through.
i am still working a bit on connecting the two parts
i love the first stanza, not only for it reminds me my self a long, long time ago, but because of that feeling it shows and in return evokes in me.
Yeah I think the second stanza is a whole new poem. Thanks for reading.
it is my pleasure
(i do sometimes miss your replies with your way of doing them, i should be more careful next)
I should just use the reply :-).
perhaps it is just me
but i like to check My Comments story here in wordpress and see..
Ahh, love song. and an electric one too. I hope the intended recipient liked it, that is the only true test of a love song.
Thank you Paul.
fabulous energy cocoyea. such awkward and genuine love
the two stanzas def have a different feel and energy but i can’t decide which one i like better — the stinging hurt or the deep passion. i really like the second to last line. pretty.
Thank you Lissa.